In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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- U& |; j- Z. }1 LIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
9 Z1 a2 F% [7 aFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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. l8 g" O- r% W" q8 }- ?In the memory of my life
7 s( Z  A! Y* z$ oYou planted a dream
" s8 T$ `6 o; a4 B: XShould the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
  {$ s0 D, J. U4 r4 a& ]% A* v3 ?听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

; X7 M0 [# h! \/ J1 iIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
8 U8 A+ d, o" ?. lFrom sunset til dawn
% R: A% B; i- y# S* rThrough darkness to light
$ I( a+ }1 I) O* C6 x" Q$ W& J& cNourished with my soul
  Y! L# @, X. B2 F1 g; ^Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。
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加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
加精加精！

% E0 i5 @$ U: q9 C我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
6 S2 m5 ]- Y" o& p( o9 [/ N2 j如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

/ ?& j2 l, X4 S* I  ]五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
! p7 n- F/ h3 G( U  v# y2 rShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

: g3 O$ A. J9 k, T4 [Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

7 a( W2 b. b- q* F- ]# BThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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9 g& ^, L$ I$ I$ ~" E1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

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五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
* H9 H. T2 s& G/ R, Uthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

5 l' h% Q- ^4 |9 QShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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5 ~1 J# s) H- G0 }2 D5 @有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

Don't weep at my grave
- e- J4 |/ P5 i9 W' S2 `  t) S! oFor I am not there,
/ E5 ]5 I* j# v4 f, a- LI've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
1 a+ _) g/ W* c/ F2 q) ^9 ?If I'm missed, find a flower,
% ]8 ~8 V- u* L6 dI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
3 P- u) j, b( b# r9 ]5 @9 I% ^% N# PRight next to you.

Don't be sad
* Y) q1 \) L# c# c4 xWhen you remember me,
; v% a) |$ O5 o5 J0 J) V" iFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
+ ?+ c# {) V6 r/ j3 dFlirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
. u$ p7 c' s8 J/ Y3 d& h3 iChasing the thunder
Time and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
5 g: K! T: y5 Q3 R2 ]Enjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.