In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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9 P/ ]5 k# ~/ @9 o3 m: [/ x- gIn the garden of my heart
( p  w: j$ o* `6 W" E, J$ _, D% v. jYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
- P/ X! {3 T8 T8 nThrough darkness to light
- l4 L# Q3 z3 ]  @, QNourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

' @4 B9 z9 w# L" V  `In the memory of my life
1 T- m. y9 D& D7 F) P/ u4 c9 _You planted a dream
7 C1 L1 t3 I! J9 sShould the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
" o; ^7 L5 h' @+ z) k: XBursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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9 G& J* p' x4 n; b$ _In the garden of my heart
+ Z# R% _6 F+ ZYou planted a tree
( y; F3 j( e; J- gFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

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; }+ C" C; @- t! X% U7 O眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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6 l2 u+ j6 I( C3 \0 p) D2 W写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
# D* f7 y, G  q1 B; {& {加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

2 Z, ~% K9 ^+ U* V1 C- C五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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) M, H. ^; M& b: d7 P- L& n( \8 ^1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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9 P0 R' j9 Q7 L4 J- {. {9 }Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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3 D2 S5 e. }. u: FShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
2 n* J. H0 Y7 X; rthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

9 A- m: e1 {/ _: f, C2 B# G  B8 A( }Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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' t3 l& z/ D6 H: b' |有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

  y1 l' p5 v4 U7 lDon't weep at my grave
) s$ ?. w# [, V) t* `For I am not there,
* z" p: s: o( {, s7 O  n; cI've a date with a butterfly
4 k7 w3 L" k5 E( v8 hTo dance on the air.
' s4 _' C5 K0 NIf I'm missed, find a flower,
. l6 U8 f* V! z: j$ n- aI'll be there too,
7 k3 y) j; i+ R& q* h, ^Sniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.
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Don't be sad
: l: J  C3 k# M' JWhen you remember me,
/ K% M" {& A0 R5 `For I'm singing in the sunshine,
) @( Y2 \+ `% F" R6 rWild and free,
% m1 _  L$ O0 mFlirting with the lighting,
/ V! i+ `. _6 B9 C1 K% N% G4 h( aPlaying tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
9 N. B- g, C% xTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
  [1 L4 E( E. y( \0 |# KSwimming in the sea,
' |7 B" O6 @0 ]Enjoying all of nature
* V! u+ D9 k8 iWhile I'm waiting for thee.