In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
+ X9 X) Q# l' p% B' Y, xYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
( P# r3 f2 N, Q+ j) Q5 DNourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life
+ i% Y9 x+ C6 C- \" R8 H% @  {! K/ |1 LYou planted a dream
3 C' w" Z  y. o& `1 zShould the sky fall down on me
* Y+ J& I) s+ G% C6 MMay promises fade in the sea
6 V. D0 {5 v, N8 ~5 j0 KSewing back every broken pieces
+ T# ?& I7 y, J" d8 [- f# J! JBursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
0 G5 a4 w: @9 I听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

# P& l4 G1 ~6 S0 U! n$ KIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
  V8 G  E8 s6 {  L6 qFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
" P8 f5 g; X9 S7 E; {3 SNourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。
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加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
# \% b$ j  @/ ?眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
2 {! v1 e# a3 M' e9 g写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
$ n! R$ T2 ]  l( R% }* k如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

  \4 J2 [+ I& e* }- |1 l五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
& L6 |2 T; f/ E# w9 T) ]Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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' o9 \' _) O: S$ H; H$ IThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
( P" O2 ~$ {3 j5 D+ L- R1 pthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

8 O  b- _! ?9 m( Z3 ~Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
4 G5 J. \! a1 [% Nthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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/ F8 @, E  J) U+ l- w+ G+ pShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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  |9 b. ^2 M, A0 U4 a: N; q- J# |% eDon't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
& s% W: q7 P, ?) }6 z3 q( _If I'm missed, find a flower,
7 j* R4 D: A* c2 q' XI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
6 A: F) T0 g+ |$ wRight next to you.

Don't be sad
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8 w, j; _7 \4 ]7 }4 z1 l+ xFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
( A% d5 d4 P$ S% h5 F2 R- ^Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
Time and again,
' d0 d: N" X; z6 C5 {& A, USoaring with the eagle,
+ n9 H9 N3 G7 qSwimming in the sea,
9 Y$ ?; r( C7 F4 j4 R0 D3 ]  FEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.