In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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/ k/ v5 ]; Z0 t; \1 _: ^In the garden of my heart
0 M+ a9 w" T( R) F; }' o0 T1 v8 I/ nYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
4 P/ Q1 D7 Q' k: K' r" w, kThrough darkness to light
) n6 \; j9 X+ Q) X0 x1 ~Nourished with my soul
6 g4 X! m. K) XDevoured my sorrow by thee
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1 D7 h7 |& _* i" o" |  A# ?. j# a  QIn the memory of my life
* k4 R! F& c* C5 y9 E. s/ TYou planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
- m6 Y/ {+ a; e/ S, V! LMay promises fade in the sea
2 R! ?0 W- w% F4 j' X3 BSewing back every broken pieces
8 \, v  l/ d4 v- m2 t1 ^9 l( O! i+ NBursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
8 K' _* G' o0 V0 f听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
0 F! q: w6 R, \You planted a tree
" \" a4 D6 Q8 ~5 x! e& _8 gFrom sunset til dawn
- H0 P: ]6 \+ ^Through darkness to light
0 m$ u) q' D9 {2 o0 `5 h: a; c/ E) ONourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
1 M% w  N$ a2 u: B: k( r' ?8 ~$ Q眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
加精加精！

- w( E5 Z" w; Z3 P) V我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
) u8 J0 e' h# d; o6 _$ x: }如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

, V5 a5 D! \; g* I1 |五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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, K: s8 ~/ u- |* c8 ?3 q/ U; R; eThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

  z9 B$ e' X3 G0 l" t7 v2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

; [  q2 ]6 P4 B5 y  uShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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& ~  V$ S4 ]7 ]% k诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

( Z: Y1 E) p# e* `: s- NShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

! ?: l: u! _+ k3 X, G; @4 m" I1 E有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

Don't weep at my grave
  v" C6 N* O1 w) }" l& d8 @For I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.

Don't be sad
When you remember me,
' ^8 T1 Q, F" n/ `For I'm singing in the sunshine,
3 y% R! C6 I/ o) i6 }- A6 K: SWild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
- e6 z5 C  s8 i) v4 l3 j8 ]* aPlaying tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
' Q/ y% x. X$ {9 t7 R* b% Y/ Z. fTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
. e% `/ s8 u8 Y* u3 ?; ^1 `Swimming in the sea,
" N. P6 K" p7 [% N1 G; E* IEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.