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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!1 ?2 s3 K. n& B' P3 X; ?9 P
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In the garden of my heart% h: d, Y, x6 O
You planted a tree
  I( _3 d9 y" y1 eFrom sunset til dawn
6 O# j) V+ C# f6 X! jThrough darkness to light% k: H4 N) K. z( s. H4 W/ ]; w
Nourished with my soul
; U4 O9 l/ @1 F3 l8 }Devoured my sorrow by thee
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# }3 q* a! F. c7 [  X9 FIn the memory of my life
' |: |$ j+ Q+ h* O8 t( \# BYou planted a dream6 p2 B2 y1 a8 x# @/ k! @4 K3 `1 F9 o" e
Should the sky fall down on me4 h- ~- u3 x* K6 Z$ Y8 J  x
May promises fade in the sea7 ]: N  B" [4 S2 P+ H- W
Sewing back every broken pieces9 p) Z# _2 }& |- ~: v' o+ U
Bursting the love out of me3 d+ M$ R3 q# U4 S

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表& C) K" Z0 I% L  U$ g. j
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!4 T, [  P1 W( V" U% Y

: c0 _% z+ H4 t6 i# R! H7 \In the garden of my heart# a0 ?4 G9 K6 G
You planted a tree- ^& \& f+ V3 s- H6 V  |8 R0 a4 L
From sunset til dawn
0 e* l  J2 B/ T! Y1 v0 ZThrough darkness to light
1 U, \7 |3 e/ X5 s# JNourished with my soul& U* {- ?+ h( |- P  U! L7 Q3 n
Devoured my so ...

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3 q8 W8 ]3 t+ k# v4 y眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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写得真好。( h& r! M; H! f: B- M$ N1 P

! _7 [* r9 I  ?& ~* u/ J* D7 V加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
7 Y4 G! b3 D: v, ?# h" T3 Q眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
4 A" y' H* _+ G) |& K/ b% k写得真好。
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
% Y  j) p  K4 m% i8 z4 E- o如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

+ k- {( R+ }1 N, f; H五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.# t: @! l/ U$ d
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
0 A. ~3 O" u2 ]$ }% kShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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+ M& q& |4 b0 R  |Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.; L0 f- T0 u4 b) y6 U
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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6 q+ r7 ~( V' ]1 ~( q2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。$ Q$ t. L$ G" P7 t+ |6 g# y/ j3 W: o

2 {* p7 i7 M1 X2 Z7 W: Y; @0 T% xShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
  X7 E$ R& q" M. k& ^) Kthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。: ]1 H0 G3 q' o1 m
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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; e/ i+ \0 J/ \+ l! Q7 d; p+ n诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表9 e# I8 b" d1 V1 d( C6 N
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。& U( B( v9 H8 ^5 s" [! }
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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: m) x" y6 P* L* W% I有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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+ S) q4 |/ b6 [& C. b比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave! Q1 R' m) p% e- S0 I' I
For I am not there,
7 t4 Y; c: O" @8 n8 h! ?9 aI've a date with a butterfly
6 M- n1 z; @' f) H# c3 m7 CTo dance on the air.
8 E9 t2 N) `4 Y, W; C3 _9 JIf I'm missed, find a flower,0 C6 X2 ?/ A9 Y+ u6 i
I'll be there too,
) W$ {+ H0 k% @# f: e( jSniffing it's fragrance! ~( I8 D# v6 S: R$ c/ `' L$ D
Right next to you.: X8 W7 `$ R; y& a5 O4 F

) H" ]7 o  s# J& n+ [' ZDon't be sad0 O' s* m& Y5 t$ J  n
When you remember me,' M9 ?, [+ @4 l# w! P: b  Y
For I'm singing in the sunshine,3 R; L  P. J4 B
Wild and free,- u8 \4 B2 J' i' O& g
Flirting with the lighting,% S8 Y' }' m" U' y0 u0 N
Playing tag with the wind,. `" U: c7 Q* T" F( A! I
Chasing the thunder
  o7 x5 M' Z7 Q7 @5 S5 ZTime and again,
4 _1 I6 N. D* h2 F, Y( ^# D3 QSoaring with the eagle,5 {' u" c, M8 {5 v
Swimming in the sea,
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$ d) l7 X$ t( V5 x& b5 }; @, H; ^While I'm waiting for thee.
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