In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

+ X. M4 V7 z6 R1 Y0 qIn the garden of my heart
+ U8 Q/ U7 `9 Z2 s& x- ^You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
6 m  j5 v1 P6 O, [$ q* b- PThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

In the memory of my life
4 e# K* Q+ l3 G* y! zYou planted a dream
  q' k: O  Q9 [+ I' f; I9 k/ K2 bShould the sky fall down on me
5 o' q+ V8 G- d8 @May promises fade in the sea
- t" c7 q5 E/ e) ]3 [Sewing back every broken pieces
% U) S7 q9 E  b+ a# k3 p! ~Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

  l! `* f  [# Y% e0 JIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
+ w; Y/ }; w7 C: f+ H. D& GThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
* ?9 H; L: ^2 P- j9 R& |Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
6 M5 b* y5 b$ J( o眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
0 p: T: ?2 m( B  m& `/ t/ y# U; S. A写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
2 _1 R# O4 b( u2 a0 S# j如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
' [2 u0 [! H% eShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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% X8 N! w% z: L5 n& Q* HSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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7 v. l# @: P# h& `+ X% qShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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! O% z4 r" u* `# Y- t& g5 N4 uShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

1 V" D% s- i% o0 Y2 H有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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- K0 e! R4 }. |" d1 }- CDon't weep at my grave
( F3 r, T$ c8 @' V! ]6 k" f4 zFor I am not there,
) z5 s# N, B$ i; G! vI've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
! K* E9 U# j! OI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.
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Don't be sad
When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
: o4 P9 Y! Q4 @. Q0 ?( aWild and free,
1 d5 f8 w- G; F+ u- P0 o" V* C6 x1 iFlirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
% T, m" R+ x" z9 Z1 t( xTime and again,
1 U! X5 h. T7 Z2 e- m) a6 s& pSoaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.