In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
3 \; c: |" e& u+ v" s) H( b6 wYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
2 j/ Z  v4 a/ h; |5 s& ~8 J9 AThrough darkness to light
) }! r2 D" Q4 i% A( y- qNourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

In the memory of my life
You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
7 B% I7 n$ b; G& X9 oSewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

  t( v9 Y4 D5 ]% P& QIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
7 O/ }: M: b, ^4 _From sunset til dawn
' K& W$ o1 O3 D, y2 u- AThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

9 Q+ Y0 u$ t$ F写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
' ^. ^9 F5 f1 H# _2 C. g7 V眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

. \3 m: s% Q4 NSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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2 q- u' `) P5 @+ f" P: c3 n2 T5 dThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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3 X( l/ m$ g8 N( m! c. {( E# P: w2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

0 F1 `: D4 C( T/ g. r) SShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
) r2 e  M; O$ I( x# vthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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6 {/ {; P, X$ }3 j& U5 cShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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; |, O7 B2 f& k2 s+ V5 D8 R有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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7 R3 N+ i" W: |2 j# }0 u2 r比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave
1 J6 c3 Z( }. h" |8 ?For I am not there,
9 J3 B/ e  l$ WI've a date with a butterfly
$ f8 x  U- c9 C  d% sTo dance on the air.
; n, |& Q/ t! k, yIf I'm missed, find a flower,
- `! X$ m7 P0 p. S+ m8 z0 b2 PI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
  r8 B. e) m0 a( [Right next to you.
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Don't be sad
) Z4 f5 u! ]) M) AWhen you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
! W$ {" u+ \- r4 }4 }) S  jWild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
2 }5 u6 G0 C9 G! rPlaying tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
; V6 @/ i! }1 q/ zTime and again,
/ j4 d" o1 y. n  j) G$ KSoaring with the eagle,
2 n: d( h; ^/ ^2 q. y3 T! _0 g0 OSwimming in the sea,
1 Z7 T& F- L5 i' A6 P% x  ]4 EEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.