In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
$ T* Y% A8 e; O- t/ @  vFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
, ~, n& P+ ~  O% z9 `Nourished with my soul
: }1 k. c5 f0 O" sDevoured my sorrow by thee
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* t- X! P- @7 l% u/ c6 t& ?In the memory of my life
You planted a dream
; k/ F3 G  g' R3 o& Z6 vShould the sky fall down on me
  k/ B% ~7 J2 \/ T' d9 m$ ~" ^May promises fade in the sea
+ d7 D0 ~) m" k. O, x9 c. |Sewing back every broken pieces
* j7 c* s* j3 y! K  Z" MBursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
2 c" |4 e% x, y2 r3 I% d9 M1 L听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
4 [9 n$ Y3 H% V, K; mYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
8 b- U/ \0 I* Z2 GNourished with my soul
* o; `$ O& ^" ?- B3 i9 D) ]Devoured my so ...

: h- F: q2 V, Z4 `" Y' Q, M眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

, n( X8 e( U1 p0 h0 U9 w( [写得真好。

1 h& n5 }. I% d: m) v+ c加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
' [! @( W; L, S/ [  Q" I. ^眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
加精加精！

' U) s* z8 g! m+ v. {/ M我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

/ z" a) ]# A0 d, _0 l五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
: M2 K6 h/ Z3 |# fShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
. A7 C3 R; F1 [" t  c) I0 \- Bthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

' z! G2 G1 Q) ~: P( vShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
) M; W3 i  W$ e. `thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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5 J3 c: K! D! [, i$ v1 l) T" iDon't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
1 i$ p! z0 x' A. O. bIf I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.
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8 h/ {% `# I* M" X" VDon't be sad
When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
+ C; N1 D+ K4 T. }6 sWild and free,
. K9 y  d' N1 z0 T/ x+ g$ O/ DFlirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
6 F& s$ M' Y/ A/ Y* B5 }8 VChasing the thunder
5 M' Z  N  l% r7 p4 i' `+ G1 yTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
7 n: @: a9 z1 ESwimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
+ V* E1 S' V8 jWhile I'm waiting for thee.