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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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1 y: V3 L9 ]4 ^* h4 MIn the garden of my heart
" v/ }& A" t7 A9 P- jYou planted a tree. ]5 k- ?8 j6 h- E
From sunset til dawn
, i1 U7 r3 v8 |! |/ R. Q3 JThrough darkness to light- Q  l) k7 v( M( ~
Nourished with my soul
3 m$ p# g# O; f% `/ A3 x5 h2 y2 l* PDevoured my sorrow by thee; u$ q3 U5 Y5 K
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In the memory of my life# F1 V" r- V/ a* ^* t  }1 N
You planted a dream
3 U: s  s1 H# }4 U0 r7 MShould the sky fall down on me
7 c3 t7 z3 B; ^: S7 _May promises fade in the sea1 \' z' }. T, A" M
Sewing back every broken pieces
9 H* m6 L% U$ K3 q' ?Bursting the love out of me! ]7 L1 l  h; @. s/ Y
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
8 o, @4 y0 A- O听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!. E5 n" j, w7 C  Z. B; d: }; n
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In the garden of my heart2 A+ C; i$ _7 L; {% |( f
You planted a tree' N) L2 [7 U/ I
From sunset til dawn  J0 C% D( {& i; d
Through darkness to light
8 T; q" [) |: E# u7 [Nourished with my soul
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6 {5 t) ]1 d: R( R眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?" T0 {7 D" H$ z( q. q4 ?- G
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写得真好。
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2 n# U8 C+ s& u- i, P+ e加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表3 t+ Q' s5 d/ Z
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
2 f4 `+ B4 Q' w! G0 W8 }7 f写得真好。2 k1 B; G0 U1 \$ v5 J
加精加精!

7 j' @, v) l. g3 S# d我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
; F/ \  L+ u, p+ i如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

& U# o6 M5 z# _+ A' M: F五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表/ O5 G) h# l/ p, f0 P/ M( L
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.. y$ Q0 i5 y. Y5 i$ Z( I2 q! Y4 V

+ f: d" K+ S$ m( d- U3 [" w& J1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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  _: W$ d3 g$ @6 I7 I: j7 x8 t0 q2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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$ i& f. O  {; h& R0 JShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
2 H, V3 D6 q# x9 T0 v7 D. C; Ythee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表5 T" r; c8 X" K, j
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊,有很多经典的例子。. Y* a: X4 I- @+ x& t

0 {0 j9 N. I; v. g# q5 X1 ~比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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" t- h8 w2 L2 B- LDon't weep at my grave
. m% q1 X3 h' I0 `( |7 _For I am not there,7 K' W5 K5 Z) C. @4 B+ e
I've a date with a butterfly
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If I'm missed, find a flower,' q. o) L, N- \6 r& Q2 {! C
I'll be there too,
/ x9 q- ?& x- H. ~  WSniffing it's fragrance
) Y6 ~, [" {. t) D' K# n1 C* ZRight next to you.
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- t& E* s3 \6 U8 F) pDon't be sad
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# S4 ?) u& j; h* u5 zFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
; w0 M2 {; C5 C0 k! s: A- O+ QWild and free,9 v3 e! x" w2 l% T
Flirting with the lighting,* @9 f& K( O. V# O2 i
Playing tag with the wind,
9 q2 j2 C% v4 j. d2 R5 k" }Chasing the thunder
' R: l- o( w; J3 u- @9 L- E0 J& T* aTime and again,3 I' t  A1 c* x! l# C' q
Soaring with the eagle,* K2 d! m: n8 i# i. c" y
Swimming in the sea,
0 W# x, I9 P4 ?9 h" |Enjoying all of nature
; Z9 o5 P0 x0 X4 Q3 mWhile I'm waiting for thee.
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