我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川

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是我们小区  几十户
) m  `# u+ X; L) F/ I唯一的元老
一住三十多年

/ E/ b$ N# {9 M" V) r, z2 X$ A; @. ?邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
# e0 Q0 q' \# b% i, w. g! `! ^开车铲雪  挖土栽花
% `9 h& x8 m1 x' G8 V似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
4 B; q# X9 q& E( L' U( X; E) l/ V6 |说她属土龙
8 j% s7 T" a( R7 ?9 ^$ s其笛声也悠扬
: ?* D7 P" C. f. N那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
) ]4 w2 Y0 s% R% v* [, K& I- f那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

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英文版，欢迎指正：

  g2 ]; i6 d$ [/ \4 `5 q: q) {Living here for more than thirty years,
% S8 T* B3 p0 o2 d5 F/ emy prestigous neighbour
% N) b! f) A6 J$ g) C8 ]is the only first owner of the unit properties
4 c$ a3 L( m! k5 F! M. N, Y' ain our community ---
; ]' q  }% }8 Q- t! vtens of townhouse condos.

0 x0 t" W8 v; d" c% s* u/ f3 |$ e/ o  {Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
# ~, c( j5 R) Rmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
  }- |& g8 B" S$ M( y: T2 Q% H6 OHer light-footed movement
! w1 _0 L% J* m* Uis just like a flying swallow.

, V: K3 J" ?0 ^7 R$ m! A) b: X7 X' aShe shovels the snow on her door lane
4 d, ?- k. R0 c1 lbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
0 w' o  j7 D+ b/ |1 l" y( D& ~4 Fto plant flowers ---
4 `5 |( E, t8 ^: _8 Aas if she did not know what years mean.

With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
) \5 m) W' }- ]' `is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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* Z8 ?7 |* C( ]- H6 YNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
2 k: T7 F& V- @9 t6 jWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
% G5 Q7 m+ l+ o3 p3 ifrom the next side of my wall;
0 f, q" Q8 |, E, v+ U- a. k0 J6 }7 `the unknown tune is extolling
5 e. h5 E' }* n0 R! kthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

6 ]- C+ z+ n6 U6 s  n土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
4 t- d  g& U; O7 x. ^" EJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
$ b( B, f3 Z3 p) J  ?1 o另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
  o1 L1 t4 Z- D, k) M9 lis just like a flying swallow.
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Her light-footed movement
" n6 L5 Y+ U2 His just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing
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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

9 x9 n  W/ ]' {我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。