我尊贵的邻居(11)

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# {# j0 l$ n5 ]" C  {; B2 s" Y! Y我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年

3 _; r( G0 a$ l2 _. P邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
/ y& b' K- l3 ?4 V4 S白发红颜  不见皱纹
1 ^0 {) h% y# Z# |' y0 d& y开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
/ }/ i7 E2 x& d  r邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
+ d# m) W7 B: Z2 L, o, C  Y; [邻居的字
' D0 y. H1 q) e  X: u则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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9 L  t1 f$ A" ~6 b( e. P邻居酷喜中国文化
  H0 ^7 |' Z9 x; f( U9 K! ~6 x说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
4 K7 D# T3 V+ a" Y. A1 J+ {那是从隔壁传来的
  N6 \+ ~: P/ f& _+ Y6 i唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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! y. u: \0 l1 U英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
8 c( O. r% v6 bmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
$ ^+ w: M3 ]6 l: @% G! Xin our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.
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! x5 l) k" t0 h" F; l5 ^0 hNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
' K8 Z8 Z5 e' t% U: x: lmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
9 H3 ?5 M! A7 h" u- UShe has white hairs and red faces.
# b" Y) s' g4 T0 qHer light-footed movement
3 `& n0 C6 q- z4 h) mis just like a flying swallow.

$ `- T$ a7 V8 V' G. {2 ZShe shovels the snow on her door lane
4 L. M) E( H; \; ^5 L$ _  dbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
as if she did not know what years mean.

6 \4 N0 L$ v4 {; X  TWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
2 s" a$ f# ?8 j0 [as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
- I6 V/ A, y. V$ Q- mis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

, A8 ?9 U: Z# L1 b7 Y5 RNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
' a3 P+ m% M( ~; v! k, B" ofrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
4 i+ y3 f& F! R3 Ithe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
3 T) t6 M2 J' f0 h% w4 B$ K7 `again and again.

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. {: l3 k/ S/ `  j  ]$ ?土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
" r) r+ n7 C0 _  D; p2 iJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
6 {% H  ^% \9 @4 m* _9 p5 NHer light-footed movement
$ J; U3 k* D% N8 V) eis just like a flying swallow.
% D0 r; o1 H  o9 A3 L- P修改为：
; M9 F- c# [4 f0 m  VHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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) B% H( Z; s( K! d/ t+ G真的是太像朱镕基了！

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。