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  1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level.
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( U. A/ f4 G, Y  改进:Artists' work upgrades our civilization.
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  2. For example, you work in a big factory.
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  改进: Suppose you work in a big factory. " H4 k+ k7 q% P9 x+ r, c
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  3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job. 2 ^2 P* K& {+ N2 {
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  改进:You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career. $ E! ^6 I! F1 @- J- Z
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  4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck. + M+ d& {% R  ?7 H

2 z8 l  r5 i3 t  改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck. . b( P* X- E* C& C9 F
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  5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level. # Z1 X$ F: I. ]; e8 ?3 U

3 M' L$ X- y# \  改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life.
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  6. Their brain is still very young.
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  改进: They are still immature.
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  7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things.
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. a! q+ R5 U, z1 [' F/ G6 x/ s$ w  改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better. $ x9 W" E. P* m5 s1 z$ {
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  8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.
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  改进: They cannot tell right from wrong.
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  9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.
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  改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time.
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  10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life. 4 S$ e3 `3 L4 F4 Q

$ z: M4 V1 f" l2 e3 m5 d6 V, ~  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it. 4 S) z. I; s- ]- V! ~6 j
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  11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development.
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  12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money. , q1 \' b; @) k

5 N$ ~: X. `+ _, l" z  改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money. * c8 C  i* ~& O# m- o

3 J2 `1 @; Z& l4 Y  13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life. * u4 T) {6 X& U% b7 j5 I0 b
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  改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one. " t5 g9 _. ^" \0 y+ K

0 ]1 o  @; k( `( G0 H% r  14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.
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  改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more. : K  Q* A( _* ~$ n0 |4 T- S

$ n$ g* j/ Z5 }* u  15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products. " ~/ ~) {1 f, T* z$ a+ P4 _9 s' ^
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  改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products. # K  n$ z5 u0 j
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  16. In order to suit the needs of entering into work, students must grasp some technical skills.
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  改进: In order to meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills.
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  17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians.
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  改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand.
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  18. This knowledge will become a part of your body.
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  改进: This knowledge will become part of you.
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  19. They cannot think clearly.
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  改进: They cannot think straight.
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  20. Money can improve their living standard. 0 Z8 o8 e5 A5 x/ E0 b
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  改进: Money can improve their life.
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4 Y) W6 O5 ]& G0 ]3 Y  21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money.
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  改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money.
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  u( _9 X  I' w) b  22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life.
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  23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later. / X6 \) S  x* |1 q" z* N. _) A
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  改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn. . ^1 s6 H( K+ s' l+ w, q+ c- {, }

) v0 I( T% w: Q, ?( R  24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano. 1 @& w% m! g% B8 z/ s
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  改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes. 8 r( z' n/ Z& p. s
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  25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion, I will study with others.
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  改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others.
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/ y& e) T: a+ C1 i  26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
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$ Q4 d3 I4 @( V1 F% d6 g1 @" e6 g  改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal.
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+ Q3 t8 i+ k, d% e% |% C  27. Smoking can help you relax your mind. ( k+ c% `. \3 ?+ m
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  改进: Cigarettes can help you relax.
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  28. What's about nonsmokers?
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  29. Why not to be a non-smoker?
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" B/ S3 Z8 l- A  30. Everyone will have many friends in his life.
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  改进: Everyone has friends in his life.
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1 P4 |3 f$ e& G6 Z  31. I am not good at maths, but English 2 X+ ?8 u( I: C/ _/ F7 J( j: R& @( r
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  改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.
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9 G9 x/ y6 }- u! v8 D8 W5 L  32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time? 0 f- k5 s; \" W1 y9 h  W! e$ R) S
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  改进: Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time?
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  33.It is children who clear about their interests.
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  改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.   w/ i% o# q7 y! Y4 D2 F6 y
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  34. I agree the latter idea.
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  改进: I agree with the latter idea.
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  35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.
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  改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
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  36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.
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; p7 }5 N' a. J1 A4 Q4 C% i  F  改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
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  37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.
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# S+ [* a7 Q$ \  c: n  38. No one knows all the things.
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4 d9 [8 \$ w" l. F, h  39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
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  40. Each form of having friends has its advantages
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  改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages.
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, ~5 L7 S& t  c7 J) ~5 S  41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up. ( o# D( l& X8 N5 Q0 j. j; o) d

: a. l; S" w8 E5 u9 `  改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply ( a. b, {( [0 B8 |# H2 b5 S

5 \, W% F% y7 d  42. Luckily, he recognized an American professor. 7 R$ S) u: L1 l# w* }# b$ X

! Y3 d1 D. f3 m* f/ b: x+ I5 t  改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.
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  43. They will learn the bad habits. $ Z" e/ h" l0 @/ _( x% a

" M) _4 E/ h& [/ g  改进: They will develop bad habits. ; E% O/ q/ \% ?$ l1 H

8 `, N; Y* Z5 h  i  44. In this continued process, people make progress. ) C9 t5 t( z  s; o: B$ }8 x

+ D+ {9 e1 e# R  改进: In this cycle, people make progress.   i3 }' B* H9 ~, O4 w4 M& |

1 W: u  p8 ~0 A1 X: \. S% g  45. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary.
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1 Q* c9 _; E# G6 s: z  改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary.
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6 A* N  j9 {' h4 U& l  46. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency.
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  改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings.
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  47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact. ( k: b/ H, B1 g7 M- S

0 `5 M' ?( m: W' y  改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result.
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  48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing.
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  改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream. # C" t" z( v3 S! \

& x. ?4 |- x' z9 S) Y! I! S% \  49. Children should be taught disciplines in order to avoid unnecessary lost.
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  改进: Children should be taught discipline in order to avoid unnecessary loss. ; ~" ?* n2 g6 ^

6 z8 `; `4 H5 k' Z: N2 G' u  50. I felt alone.
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  改进: I felt lonely.
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wow, where did you get those sample (the cheglish one)? I have to say the revised samples are really really good. 0 Y  E% R1 y: Y
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-2-26 07:02 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
平时的积累,呵呵!
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发表于 2005-2-26 14:03 | 显示全部楼层

顶!

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发表于 2005-3-1 08:25 | 显示全部楼层

很好。

能否解释一下 status quo 是什么意思。
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发表于 2005-3-1 08:37 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
是现状的意思
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发表于 2005-4-9 18:26 | 显示全部楼层
:lol::lol::lol:
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发表于 2005-4-9 20:42 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
Wow,看得我头晕目悬的...还是记不住...呵呵
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发表于 2005-4-9 21:09 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
有些改进似乎意思有些改变...
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发表于 2005-8-24 02:47 | 显示全部楼层
好哦.xiexie
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发表于 2005-8-24 19:48 | 显示全部楼层
thanks
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发表于 2005-8-24 21:11 | 显示全部楼层
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