In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
4 {6 Y# a' a( h- A7 nFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
) [: c+ A5 o# ?8 G. BNourished with my soul
6 I2 f# w/ }6 ~- n% W' M0 ~Devoured my sorrow by thee
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1 `4 j1 C9 A% w; D9 ?6 b: xIn the memory of my life
You planted a dream
/ t7 l0 \4 ?! l8 y/ [/ pShould the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
# x3 O9 y. M, g, G8 jSewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
: P8 p1 O0 W! r! J% t# S4 {听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
6 S1 s' m' B7 B, x3 X2 m9 h6 K' LYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
+ ?8 ]# D5 {0 o1 {Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
2 x/ i) H- Q; G; K& s+ @5 `Devoured my so ...

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- B; M. A) k! n眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

写得真好。

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Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
; C6 S5 x5 q: Q) m" Z, `. B1 j写得真好。
6 B. R5 O1 x; c+ f- C9 B3 R% r加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
8 H1 H+ [% S0 a  O* I, x如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

8 ]4 k: ~* j. ^1 @; c4 u6 q五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

: G0 _9 `: Q+ v! @5 FSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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* n! a, A- M5 U2 ^8 z4 UThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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% ^! d2 r* F; j- W1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
! e7 e6 i8 X- v6 H1 |9 @. {thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

) e! o1 ^$ }, h& U! oShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
: l% E4 {5 [/ {: F# Xthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

Don't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
% F. |! q( k, ?I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
: P' m" h% z5 i! Y6 f  `I'll be there too,
" ?) J( F7 [$ J3 l1 u4 zSniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.
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7 V: E" L3 g9 X/ M* X/ n1 b$ ]8 j+ VDon't be sad
When you remember me,
+ d5 s; \( C* ~! UFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
" `5 @2 C7 Z# OWild and free,
  K  o2 A, K; C8 X3 X4 g. }Flirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
Time and again,
- ?# @/ U9 C1 ?! zSoaring with the eagle,
& u) V4 g$ [8 ^- v: y1 L( u2 n/ wSwimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
( i6 }5 @; t/ JWhile I'm waiting for thee.