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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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6 z4 N. ^, b' q" m" M, k( DIn the garden of my heart
6 N7 b8 S+ H9 y( ^* c& H, XYou planted a tree/ ^$ f  U" T9 T+ H4 C8 V6 u- ^
From sunset til dawn
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Nourished with my soul- z1 S/ N; P. D4 S
Devoured my sorrow by thee; _, i9 z3 U1 @

6 ]$ a; y* i, s" r7 QIn the memory of my life* ^2 H7 d; H" F' U* M3 ~% V/ y
You planted a dream
( Z/ p. V; I6 f5 @+ KShould the sky fall down on me' `; S; H% ?3 U& Y
May promises fade in the sea
( N4 A% m5 K4 d2 k( H. N9 M9 pSewing back every broken pieces; }% _2 t. t' ~/ H, K
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
3 u+ @$ V+ P$ S6 J7 g$ ^. w6 b听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!. z) j# L& s; w4 f" J+ T
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In the garden of my heart% u$ M# s8 u1 r& O7 G5 y
You planted a tree; m9 o0 j% o4 H7 [
From sunset til dawn
0 S. g% x* G% k) c0 oThrough darkness to light; I8 P9 O  g- [# q
Nourished with my soul* d* ?) y% `0 y. i
Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?, D' ]8 {# U! z1 _. T: s
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写得真好。: v. j+ k* `0 N& |" C

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
- z# ^" |/ G; j1 q& c' L0 W眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
3 T1 N: G+ y$ d! c写得真好。
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0 q0 S+ |; g  L0 H我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
% i# B, h$ c; Q" \0 ~1 Y如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.' M: Q1 j) i9 g  B
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
2 d% |8 Z3 K: _# q9 w' D6 bShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.! A6 R. u0 \/ q* ~" S

* H& l# @9 g: i4 P: b! W1 VSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
' S; [8 S/ C' I: N. j2 q" m( Lthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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+ ^2 G' W7 [* f: p' I诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表& I5 l; w9 }4 j' J) N! ]4 p% w
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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/ v. j) f+ J' ~. A, A2 C+ p- R& V* h有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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8 ~  t1 |8 I/ ], V; w. R0 o比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave
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I'll be there too,) H8 g( D6 {5 f* l
Sniffing it's fragrance
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Don't be sad! [# L0 j- N0 |/ p8 ?' e
When you remember me,* W$ N3 r& ]1 C' ?, u8 _# j" y
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
8 c) t& N- f2 q* ]Wild and free,
0 \! S+ b% T! E$ x% [( vFlirting with the lighting,
2 s* \8 V: q7 R0 v! hPlaying tag with the wind,
; S, F' g( H% Z9 A. T' m' wChasing the thunder# C% v2 V& ]% s$ ?% i$ n. U
Time and again,
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  X/ T' `, }. V2 WSwimming in the sea,
  ]; y: s) J  rEnjoying all of nature6 v/ g; V4 z- W* U9 R3 _
While I'm waiting for thee.
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