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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!* l* l# V; M  H5 X1 K: n" K1 E
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In the garden of my heart5 h% j5 C- v! e  \( h- ~: H8 a4 b
You planted a tree9 j' H& x' b" K( |
From sunset til dawn
7 P6 U5 a7 t& s& n+ C: yThrough darkness to light1 |# ~. K- Q: f7 r/ @2 z8 M
Nourished with my soul
  h( _- C" Z' i+ Y4 LDevoured my sorrow by thee( W6 Z2 [# ~+ f& ?

9 Z" M; F+ W+ BIn the memory of my life9 Q2 u5 b' e' Q! w+ l
You planted a dream
, x8 z$ M, V: @& i1 K7 uShould the sky fall down on me
1 q: |& n' R  b3 A6 vMay promises fade in the sea
0 |' Q+ Z. }, q, ySewing back every broken pieces: _& O( Y  f, W. u) K
Bursting the love out of me( I8 n% y/ Z# ]: Y% d, c
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表. B% G6 j# m  G* S) U! n; K1 v
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart4 h8 k& j, m) U  ^9 E( j
You planted a tree# s+ v) ~$ ~" [1 D) l* m! u& z
From sunset til dawn3 e. Y+ ]& H# t/ t1 `( k# f
Through darkness to light
; Q) S  R& X( gNourished with my soul
* n* C* O, ^5 g4 CDevoured my so ...
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( Z" t3 A8 B+ v  f7 [5 X- S7 J眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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写得真好。! G8 f8 v* y2 \& ]. ^7 v) y

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
% _/ X2 W+ i2 R) B8 ?0 |# O眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?0 N' ^) C: q. w) K* v/ T- j
写得真好。
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表/ F! C+ v. x: i* J$ |6 u
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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" g/ o5 i3 k3 F, H6 r% K  l1 T1 S" lSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
; G$ d: d. e7 Y' OShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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7 g% L, P9 F. N- }Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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  t- R; T4 w; V* R2 H) VThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".  @0 o. ~" j# s9 N, S# n
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表( b5 {0 h0 Y/ o/ Y  M% m
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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9 Q# s. m% P4 |) d; JShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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4 [5 D( k: C1 ^0 e; L; H诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表& b$ ?# a0 W- {/ d$ u$ X
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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& Y7 i* K  d4 F; H' D2 D+ m/ q. yShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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( O( [' g$ ?# j9 {- m1 J有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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1 S& w; S3 ^+ _8 w: m6 @' EDon't weep at my grave
  X4 F1 I+ @4 AFor I am not there,  j5 r7 [( x4 m& m6 E
I've a date with a butterfly
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If I'm missed, find a flower,' V) f2 \# h! o, I4 C% W
I'll be there too,
; v5 S2 e1 @. f2 R" d! f# |Sniffing it's fragrance" q7 h8 F1 x' V/ V3 |, E6 e5 v
Right next to you.; ]3 x) G$ X1 w
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Don't be sad
# i2 k  h, @  CWhen you remember me,
  L' d* ?, M" d4 O6 wFor I'm singing in the sunshine,7 g( ~. E& ]4 g5 s
Wild and free,
, l$ ~# ~% ?  ?% ^Flirting with the lighting,
  `. g! ~, _* f+ d2 aPlaying tag with the wind,
+ I6 o( F' _6 k8 M4 d# K& NChasing the thunder# w! \9 g1 n% E$ C
Time and again,
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Swimming in the sea,
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While I'm waiting for thee.
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