In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
) V6 m+ P; o3 V& T+ R5 pNourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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$ \4 V) y1 E1 QIn the memory of my life
1 ]# ?8 L9 X" EYou planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
1 H' H) N8 l8 B' ^5 Q/ t0 N1 IMay promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
: `% |4 x, X: z5 c9 R3 W7 [听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
' Y+ M- {+ B* M$ O# n$ oFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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" ~5 }) x. l1 W2 M: ]( Q6 k写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
- \, U/ u! Z) s& n加精加精！

  Z, K4 a: l3 G6 ~% S我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

9 n( m+ F- M) t* x五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

) |! K5 P7 {7 P  `Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
& F, x8 l+ S' L& h! V( PShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

" h* e; e) o- H# R' jThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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, h! L0 T. y. G. E1 _: Q; T1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
5 p) a6 c$ W( u4 Z* Bthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
" z7 G7 q; c1 R+ W+ p, ^; Z: D5 B+ I  |thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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1 ~0 J1 P2 h, b比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

! a' ^. n! j+ \3 i8 F. hDon't weep at my grave
3 C9 R) F1 l* a. K$ UFor I am not there,
% F& H; y2 u$ yI've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
6 l$ d2 G8 M% m  XIf I'm missed, find a flower,
# Q/ D: C$ T7 t' Y( P; r, PI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.
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Don't be sad
When you remember me,
5 U8 x6 K) }8 e1 w0 J: VFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
2 t- Q6 t2 u* c9 B5 I) yWild and free,
* O  R: u- c2 R5 i" _6 t0 L- L/ |# P( wFlirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
Time and again,
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Swimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
  K* m$ ]3 u5 m2 wWhile I'm waiting for thee.