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  1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level.
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) J7 p  ~& @0 Y5 Q0 q- C' R  改进:Artists' work upgrades our civilization.
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  2. For example, you work in a big factory. : E$ M0 H/ V, a4 O4 `

' f! P( n/ N" A( y  改进: Suppose you work in a big factory. ; D" f0 F+ _/ k8 P3 ^; E+ n  J
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  3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job. * i. a" w! @7 Q1 x' D2 R

3 q" }! p( P  G' f% d1 b  改进:You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.
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  4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck. 9 \9 O* P0 m7 d/ q: H

5 u8 N+ P/ p- I4 v( e" ]6 e  改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck. # \4 P( N! p' N. L- Z6 r# f, X& ]! C
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  5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level.
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  改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life. & k& P' p3 `/ E  n$ W
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  6. Their brain is still very young.
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5 h0 ]: c* `6 F. f  改进: They are still immature.
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" Y# w' [3 r7 f. P  u. T4 r  7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things.
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, A# z, S' F# y. t# x  y* ]* t$ U1 h4 u  改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.
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# X. v6 }8 K% f! e' p  8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.
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* _8 k. b0 g& b% r; [9 Z6 W  改进: They cannot tell right from wrong.
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  9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.
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. D) r8 _3 u& w/ W: U/ T1 l  改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time.
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4 u. s5 B3 Z: s8 L  10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life.
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  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it. ( W& k6 V5 J- q/ ~) S% W, r

% F6 g* M2 H9 a, v0 A9 i  11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development. 3 u  Y; E1 ]/ \
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  改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development. ! K; E+ O8 e' a. t" b+ v: J
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  12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money. 7 i9 o& g5 j. M
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  改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money. $ Y  Z/ P% ]% {! O

2 U" b  t3 _6 p5 E3 j  13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life.
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  改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one.
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  14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.
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" ^" `' Y: ]4 b0 T. r) N) e  改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more. % v3 D5 ?% d8 Y" g4 _7 {

: ?$ Z+ J+ z9 t0 [  15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products.
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  改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products. 6 l: q; V: [$ }

0 W9 b. Z& t" ?7 M1 J9 w3 [' Y  16. In order to suit the needs of entering into work, students must grasp some technical skills. 6 u' U4 V* @0 ]! A- N- M
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  改进: In order to meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills. 4 l4 s$ b6 F2 y6 Q8 v: S$ Q
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  17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians. ' I, T# n9 R5 \/ k" b8 k

  t. U! C+ w( R  改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand. / E0 X+ V. T+ ]8 R
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  18. This knowledge will become a part of your body.
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, F% c9 c& h7 L" P* J& h  改进: This knowledge will become part of you.
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  19. They cannot think clearly. / d. o9 ^9 B8 j, ^

: M4 F5 v7 y$ ^+ i  改进: They cannot think straight.
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  20. Money can improve their living standard. & R  h/ \" [. k% W6 g9 e
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  改进: Money can improve their life.
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  21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money. & L- N( y, r9 N$ N8 Z8 u
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  改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money. / w' E% T- m7 z8 x4 V
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  22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life.
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  改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life. 5 H/ N' M0 B8 ]- f* }8 h8 ]5 q
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  23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later. 7 `: Q8 N* a8 K" t" ?) t

# ~: v0 q+ c$ [  改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn.
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0 Z  e' `- u4 N' `2 n6 w# }  24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano.
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  改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes.
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  25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion, I will study with others.
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  改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others.
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+ f; l" k4 n! w! i  26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
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  改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal.
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  27. Smoking can help you relax your mind. % E$ a  w! b6 T/ G
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  改进: Cigarettes can help you relax.
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  O+ r$ r) l; |" M0 j. o- ]  28. What's about nonsmokers? ' H% S2 Y* u  R8 g* ~

: ~) n( e9 U! U  改进: What about nonsmokers? 3 p. p0 m2 x8 @- g% k

, W4 t; p2 Y2 |6 S: L  29. Why not to be a non-smoker?
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  改进: Why not be a non-smoker? : [- O' [5 L  _7 k- M; g% X1 O/ M5 R
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  30. Everyone will have many friends in his life. 0 d8 P. o9 i/ G$ O3 r

; G; D3 v; p+ ?. |  改进: Everyone has friends in his life.
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8 c& t4 n- Z. B- m( f, z6 T1 }: }3 u  31. I am not good at maths, but English
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  改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.
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! R! l' i" S! y- d. I  32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time?
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% P* f3 F9 {# E! U) n) Q  改进: Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time?
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- L, e6 n8 J3 U. q7 A8 C% f  33.It is children who clear about their interests.
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  改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.
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  34. I agree the latter idea.
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  改进: I agree with the latter idea. ! T5 Y: I  l7 c- E

# l2 Y) ~, W& P- x3 o  35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.
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  改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo. 9 ?4 a" k- ~$ i0 Y" @8 e# P, _

, L. s  E3 b1 Q7 E+ J& {; }# i9 F  36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now. 4 z/ |/ O! B7 C9 g5 h

- g+ j( H: s- k  改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe. 1 p$ e0 ]$ P4 E* Q. @' s

3 w* e- b7 |2 J' `  37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are. ! E- x: H0 o- \

# Q: ?' n7 a8 x+ }, M. `  改进:People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.
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  38. No one knows all the things. % O) H3 p8 R4 ]1 ]8 a) o9 I
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  改进: No one knows everything.
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2 J, y9 v1 P+ G4 J) S0 W' F+ w  39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life. * v! _$ d' W0 v5 `6 q

/ N+ V5 o5 l6 z8 L* y- W. _  改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life. 0 f. |5 K9 h  U: V
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  40. Each form of having friends has its advantages
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' f6 s% n, D. g$ t5 \  改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages.
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  41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up.
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6 j: x  O$ |6 h4 U% @. T5 A0 |$ W  改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply
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1 ]8 p5 w$ i6 r  M8 l% i7 K! Y  42. Luckily, he recognized an American professor.
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  改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.
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% U; s9 \6 N7 {. l( z2 G/ K  43. They will learn the bad habits.
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  改进: They will develop bad habits. 8 O: c' m  i5 Y" E1 _& Z4 A% ]1 b

6 B1 C8 O* b) K" b  44. In this continued process, people make progress.
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& B- K7 P% Y6 Q9 T0 q$ b  改进: In this cycle, people make progress.
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  V' f5 C. B; o# D  45. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary.
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6 O0 R$ A) y* i  k5 P2 A& q  改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary. ( |/ l4 z$ d9 P. V' i8 F

3 ~0 D" |5 ~7 p. x4 }  46. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency. : ^: I- \) n$ t* y. b4 G: h  O3 g2 p! T
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  改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings.
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$ s- _, V! {( o; R$ b7 t  ~" Q: E" J) N  47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact.
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( B" g; c( w$ P8 C1 L  改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result. 0 [" P) Z8 z& f- M" x7 r
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  48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing. 2 K4 B$ n! v3 V# v- O( e# T2 J! d# _
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  改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream. 6 d; }- c8 o; z0 {/ p6 o2 n5 l
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  49. Children should be taught disciplines in order to avoid unnecessary lost.
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  改进: Children should be taught discipline in order to avoid unnecessary loss.
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  50. I felt alone.
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4 N0 }, H  ]" B# M  改进: I felt lonely.
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发表于 2005-2-24 08:39 | 显示全部楼层
wow, where did you get those sample (the cheglish one)? I have to say the revised samples are really really good. * J2 q' l: r  q# |

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 楼主| 发表于 2005-2-26 07:02 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
平时的积累,呵呵!
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发表于 2005-2-26 14:03 | 显示全部楼层

顶!

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发表于 2005-3-1 08:25 | 显示全部楼层

很好。

能否解释一下 status quo 是什么意思。
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发表于 2005-3-1 08:37 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
是现状的意思
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发表于 2005-4-9 18:26 | 显示全部楼层
:lol::lol::lol:
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发表于 2005-4-9 20:42 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
Wow,看得我头晕目悬的...还是记不住...呵呵
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发表于 2005-4-9 21:09 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
有些改进似乎意思有些改变...
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发表于 2005-8-24 02:47 | 显示全部楼层
好哦.xiexie
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发表于 2005-8-24 19:48 | 显示全部楼层
thanks
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