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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!6 Z; T' g5 e6 C# v* H" o
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In the garden of my heart
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From sunset til dawn2 u: j3 |7 q+ r# _# a/ g
Through darkness to light8 U+ p/ }+ @1 V1 z6 [* g+ r
Nourished with my soul+ |4 h3 |2 R' m, K$ J! Q
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life
) x5 I9 k3 ^7 lYou planted a dream
& P2 C/ U. h0 ^* t, p/ r" \Should the sky fall down on me
' |) P# O$ `3 ?: N; @: A; _& uMay promises fade in the sea
" z% o) n3 n2 k5 ]$ @& z5 ]- ~Sewing back every broken pieces4 p6 b: p0 ?# J& C% `
Bursting the love out of me! ?6 C7 F4 J! p+ k. B
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
1 v* |; Q6 m1 I3 `, y0 y% `听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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3 n9 |/ e- W8 B3 \* G9 I- oIn the garden of my heart3 Q; H" A# u4 z) _; P
You planted a tree
  {8 A+ W! a( S' Q: T4 `From sunset til dawn
% F- E3 E" U" Q% a$ e0 ^% HThrough darkness to light
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Devoured my so ...
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/ S8 T5 E# I- ^9 Y眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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$ m4 b; h+ y$ k- E% N写得真好。
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& t7 C- R( T# P# h0 }) n加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表" P/ g+ R/ t- Y5 ?4 Q
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?. B- C. f+ }) d( i+ \: i" Y
写得真好。
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
# V5 C2 C2 W' \& Z7 S/ a9 F如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

" P" ^$ q: J8 M4 ]# ~% U3 O1 n) O6 S五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.) Q% _# m$ q6 @4 u# H" s
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
# G% S) ?4 C1 e5 g; n* o0 a( uShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here." ~5 f$ ]" _2 z

% N1 F7 [* s$ s) g6 ~8 mSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.- J# {" ]' v% |  m6 M) d, n: F' W
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".) n/ [* M0 e; E" C9 h* E) D

2 }. ?! Z; P# \  v$ ~) T- }$ d2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
- Q9 d' s# F1 R+ z. |% P, [* ~thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。) ]# e9 B' X2 T6 f% q8 }

' n2 B5 |2 @3 V0 w# DShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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, H0 e. t" D( q. ~! ]2 U诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表9 a! S& ]! f* i$ ?
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。$ |. S* T- X4 s. g6 g! c

8 W0 W' q* C) e& T& `" KShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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有啊,有很多经典的例子。2 o) x& O% J! J5 k" f

% N/ v8 k8 k. A9 I比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》9 q$ C# q% U5 _- k& T, s
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Don't weep at my grave
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1 ~, Y* [, Z5 Y; ]I've a date with a butterfly5 ]3 Q% z  `) p$ _: c9 I; A
To dance on the air.
, L. D' T1 O3 qIf I'm missed, find a flower,
# _" P8 z) R6 t* x% K) v" B; OI'll be there too,! n; m3 y+ T8 x& I1 W) H
Sniffing it's fragrance
6 L$ B. q# C/ M4 I8 ~Right next to you.. E2 A( w# j. m- a& `% v, H
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Don't be sad; g" X: {* O1 Z  `
When you remember me,9 }0 {% K8 C# m& Q( c
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
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Flirting with the lighting,1 a1 \- k+ S" q, C1 V2 O
Playing tag with the wind," I% i+ X- T7 c1 H: l5 B, @! N
Chasing the thunder
$ y: P. n+ v0 E9 f; M& k+ wTime and again,
' [! V& f9 P$ E: M: Y& ]6 r5 l5 uSoaring with the eagle,
; s$ y6 h% `; f' Y( cSwimming in the sea,: ^# d5 l* X/ F! g" l
Enjoying all of nature
3 R5 ]  ?+ B" UWhile I'm waiting for thee.
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