In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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  @# Z! D1 G6 f9 OIn the garden of my heart
) {! ?% v: M" IYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
) a; K+ m- f, _/ B0 F6 \Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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0 O6 U* |$ {. m8 ~$ W* l7 X) ^0 {1 `In the memory of my life
You planted a dream
2 r. G) n  J4 z/ o( R7 P' w$ RShould the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
/ P8 S9 F+ s3 L" [Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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7 Z4 p  Z6 o9 i4 JIn the garden of my heart
7 ~( i1 w- h+ V; Q% O% r; [You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
; Q8 ~. ?3 n  V6 S& L7 ^: aThrough darkness to light
- n/ P, K+ s. ^. L7 r/ U7 G- f! BNourished with my soul
* w  |% E4 M# m2 ]Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

' r7 V% x9 `9 J, Q  w写得真好。

! B9 ~( ]" F. T加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
+ ~# l" G7 [5 y0 ~0 ?$ O( |. l写得真好。
加精加精！

! ^# `; k- \- A# p9 C# c- v0 w我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
& I/ E  r9 w1 C$ ^3 t; ]0 J如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

. _2 d) c7 i" W  n3 @! q5 {/ M# S五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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# O- ^# ~: \; \Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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+ E4 m. f+ n4 H: C% [1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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# z& {: W# v) O% B2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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9 z% f) Q. W, E/ Y( i7 K3 }; jShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

7 }& i8 w1 K- I. M7 z; t% w诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
# H3 s7 F2 M- @( `+ a  cthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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5 l' h' g8 ]0 F0 p8 p有啊，有很多经典的例子。

  p4 ]! E# Z0 Y  j7 v" j比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
6 `1 w! H1 S2 |4 h- II've a date with a butterfly
0 j# e7 D, N9 I+ t2 i6 ^0 ]To dance on the air.
- c5 J! X  o" L  HIf I'm missed, find a flower,
, i! W6 z2 J4 F$ B' |( l, L. KI'll be there too,
; r5 a7 G) Y; ESniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.

Don't be sad
When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
9 }8 |4 [5 K/ N, pWild and free,
. p7 E0 B2 H3 t+ jFlirting with the lighting,
* [1 I7 E( y1 q+ i/ o/ [3 hPlaying tag with the wind,
/ T3 l' F! g, X) lChasing the thunder
Time and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
4 i( ^3 H7 V8 r) z/ dSwimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.