In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
1 k; g7 P) y! \( x: f0 H7 z* qFrom sunset til dawn
+ k- B. Y& \/ n4 g3 [! lThrough darkness to light
" f) r. }& R3 n' O& |2 vNourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

In the memory of my life
You planted a dream
' e* T. r+ V; J- |' V: gShould the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
  S3 O9 q  ~' }# _7 t) _$ OSewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
2 R: C3 P( }4 @5 K听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

5 j# j( X1 Y- ~# t- D# @In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
/ K4 f7 {9 f4 C, mThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
( q9 `3 I5 ^3 _$ z  k7 u% x; b, `Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

* X: `$ y) ]2 ^2 g写得真好。

# x: M, m# _" K加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
5 j( i; X" a4 Y" g7 g3 z0 M写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

, {4 j% `0 H& r% p5 i1 c/ e五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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  N& @6 F$ R7 c& E8 B* q! _4 }Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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, _& m5 h6 {) e! p0 t9 z# QThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
/ p" B! a, ^! y1 X0 hthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
% @7 Y  M& N1 X' F# h; I, \thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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1 ]' n5 _/ E; U有啊，有很多经典的例子。

比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

Don't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
4 [) r! P- p' ~. b* W. tI've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.
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( @# |! o; B  z/ Y$ cDon't be sad
When you remember me,
! y, t  T  T5 k) s& b& wFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
, R+ }& m+ E  `  D( j2 h$ t- XFlirting with the lighting,
5 f4 F8 N5 {9 s6 ^7 l; d  h( @Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
  q: q. |% T: c: @- h0 q; ZTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
2 K( p8 R- {; ?Enjoying all of nature
4 A) ~- c. p! W% J! _5 kWhile I'm waiting for thee.