In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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" ]+ C3 @/ M0 O- z3 ?: M- aIn the garden of my heart
3 K- y4 v9 t+ D- XYou planted a tree
) T; H1 y; y" e) C4 ^From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
$ }; q1 J" v; P. qNourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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- a, u, q1 z1 |0 Z% Z( Y. lIn the memory of my life
- j, F4 O' b' y4 N9 G& rYou planted a dream
0 X! d5 ~9 S* e: ^Should the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
6 b$ b& f$ ^$ M7 VBursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
8 A6 {- V2 c/ B听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

+ I$ C( M" I( @9 C: ^* j& nIn the garden of my heart
2 h" u% Q/ p9 n! M/ o" k. P! `. TYou planted a tree
; n+ T5 ?# g1 U% lFrom sunset til dawn
! B# I. b. ?7 N8 ~; WThrough darkness to light
& |% f1 Q7 E' `, \1 h$ ~% aNourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

9 Y" U8 s3 F4 f2 \$ I2 `, B眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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4 w9 O9 v0 M* p+ j( [* G+ ^写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
4 J8 E4 j# o1 D  f; R/ G% p5 o) `眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
- I7 e+ o; Z7 E) Y$ B6 C* p3 G加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

& b+ N. g: a; E五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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5 `5 ]2 N$ R% E+ R, kSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
" Q5 b+ a/ \. @& P* S( tShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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2 X- s; O& s: M1 y0 e1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
6 h  R8 {7 J/ }# }3 pthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

% F8 u% c  z, w: w' T/ AShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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8 U# t* Q. }3 b9 T4 l诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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4 C4 W, T- G6 G, V& a' xShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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6 H+ E4 x9 e# Q& R, L/ h: c" J有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave
2 t6 i' ?' @0 [$ I* @6 j3 RFor I am not there,
( m8 `# ?$ j: r1 q) O( ~# R, \I've a date with a butterfly
9 q" H5 A' [1 m; HTo dance on the air.
. p4 n4 W/ C( h/ _, T1 HIf I'm missed, find a flower,
! B  S- Q8 H6 o+ c8 {8 i- `I'll be there too,
5 e- p: l- L  m+ I; z% OSniffing it's fragrance
% D  u* P' r6 I% G% k" hRight next to you.
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! l( K: q2 O: C3 @7 n5 WDon't be sad
When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
/ e/ J& L5 Y3 C: k; n( Y0 qWild and free,
9 f  b! G. ?* d# Z$ {Flirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
% {$ K; G7 D7 ]$ AChasing the thunder
' A1 l% i2 {7 [  d" QTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
! t: U# H6 M! D% [Swimming in the sea,
  ^6 X: Y+ S9 r- S4 A- |7 `8 r: n: WEnjoying all of nature
; E0 F+ Z2 U, R4 V2 ZWhile I'm waiting for thee.