In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

" p. y$ {% s1 ~7 u! d) O% X3 mIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life
8 v0 _) V8 w6 E# L( RYou planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
. E; Q' b; U! o, {Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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1 e  l8 @( M$ s% WIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
7 W' c) a3 x4 t& a) k" dThrough darkness to light
; ^1 X2 ]6 E4 \$ c2 qNourished with my soul
' i; X/ e3 Z7 p; {+ C8 v$ \1 zDevoured my so ...

: q8 J' z" U$ t& l! n) Q眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

% L* g! f2 ?' H/ B写得真好。
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) u  N: s" R. q: ]1 X; R, n+ L# [加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
2 L7 ~- t, R$ y+ |6 x8 [  g眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
! H( {3 _3 `* }% E0 u4 i" N: S写得真好。
: U4 ^5 X, {0 o( `- K4 U& [加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
# p3 w, {8 I* t: v7 T1 b如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

& R! b& ^7 y0 b' o, }五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
% O- F# X5 ?' b9 y/ e/ EShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

6 L; \9 ^& I" x: z) q3 j& C+ YSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

; Z  T2 E9 P0 [; l) c+ xShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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: e% Z, i, j: @诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
2 ~% {6 x* p  s6 Y& O( z/ nthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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) P2 c& _* j2 s& W* O7 G有啊，有很多经典的例子。

比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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! W  K- W! y1 }/ ODon't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
) K% T* @6 h$ P' RI've a date with a butterfly
* I! j- x. y! g! U3 `, W; zTo dance on the air.
% N" m" X0 e4 y! H' x0 g+ yIf I'm missed, find a flower,
: i) f/ c! ^6 c( Y5 C. c; Y7 qI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
/ X2 E8 V) ^& s# [/ T+ j5 nRight next to you.

Don't be sad
$ Y8 E2 s: [: a- D0 {When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
$ R* E8 N) S' b4 n' hWild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
$ k( s* O. W. L7 r1 ?Playing tag with the wind,
! s5 r" C7 R/ N- A  I1 U9 ]  eChasing the thunder
' a! _% c3 K* d! J! q3 BTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
2 c: {& k4 B0 DSwimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
* }# I1 e$ N3 z" @/ hWhile I'm waiting for thee.