我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川

我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
# H$ Q, M) m" R白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

头顶英国文学硕士的光环
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如同女面朱熔基
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4 |- ~! g3 W! o4 o则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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, h- B7 }2 @. {: |& t7 a0 B邻居酷喜中国文化
- q. E" ?- `" X# r说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
  v  K3 w3 J. F, l: ]5 X那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
# s, U' Z' ~/ T/ ^8 Ymy prestigous neighbour
7 C7 c5 b! V8 ^is the only first owner of the unit properties
4 t& _, @& `' T6 u& t# n  [in our community ---
* {8 ?* \; z6 e: Z; O  F2 l: |tens of townhouse condos.

7 }3 ]9 [% E1 s8 @/ o6 @/ r' o1 ]Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
) z$ L5 t3 ]# A+ M) z2 T2 qHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

$ h+ }1 D0 C1 I& w6 l1 L# h2 j* }0 QShe shovels the snow on her door lane
4 b% B' F  |" g4 Fbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
9 N/ }. t; v* U9 ~+ _  oas if she did not know what years mean.
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With the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
. H# c- y, u; F' N7 xas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
) g/ X  {  E! ^0 \; ANeighbour's handwriting
8 `! j4 Y! b) l( J8 p( v$ @9 Dis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
" _- |8 p0 e7 q- r2 \, U+ Bfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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- e* W  `8 ]9 }6 _& y土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
8 h& f7 S# y- r; IJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
( a% ~6 W, `" v- r7 L1 E, a另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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- Y7 q' f5 T9 H; j% U* zHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

6# Justing


1 e0 J+ b* N0 j4 P% f8 o9 C真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

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6# Justing
" U1 F" x) g/ Z- c; @" S5 `+ {. p3 _8 [真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。