我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
+ m2 M. K5 m  f/ M: o唯一的元老
一住三十多年

3 A/ `# y/ |9 I+ R& C邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
& J. n/ W1 _! z- m" W* T) j' R' {开车铲雪  挖土栽花
# R7 R- D5 _9 ~6 F# Z0 q似不识  岁月为何物
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头顶英国文学硕士的光环
邻居气宇轩昂
9 e/ I4 {  ~, B9 p如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
/ S" \$ k) S) S& N$ i0 `- J6 A3 l则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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5 x( S- O7 `  j' J3 ~- v- f9 M邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
! r! K: u4 v) Y! R; ^: e唯一的声响
$ N/ G0 r  }0 V5 d那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：
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+ L) S; U0 H7 h  M0 fLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
- G2 p# m3 ~- E! x  ?% G' S% htens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
6 v2 K. c) V7 J' S' m% KShe has white hairs and red faces.
: S4 c& b& }% N3 @. X' bHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

: p" Q4 l8 G- P+ C1 U3 m5 jShe shovels the snow on her door lane
. Z! e& d6 O9 z7 k% P4 `before driving her own car;
" n, \9 q9 g; ]" z! Hshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
8 K2 w. \* Y) S! e, n) F6 Vas if she did not know what years mean.

# i3 I( b8 C3 A$ JWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
/ {7 y, Y: r4 Oneighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
/ @2 T$ O( {6 w+ ^Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
! ~3 R' t  l: N' JWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
& ~7 Z0 g0 G! H; c/ E* Y4 e* `7 Mthat is the sole sound going into my ears
; |! M" j$ J, u: Y, q+ i! Ofrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
( c4 k. t8 Z7 S' pHer light-footed movement
& _$ w1 U5 i$ l6 U) Nis just like a flying swallow.
修改为：
5 H+ D; P5 o0 G" NHer light-footed movement
; ?; o/ x9 C; Nis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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Justing

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hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。